Tuesday, November 03, 2009

Surprise

She must be here any moment now. Dhruv is planning a surprise for Richa. Actually, not a surprise. She forced him to plan a surprise. She granted him 48 hours, Monday and Tuesday. Generous! He wanted to do something for her for a long time but it never happened. He was having a rough time at work, with project deadlines and other engagements. This time, he was having client visit on Monday, but she did not listen. Now, this is one chance, he has to impress her.

We want to do something perfect and like it happens, nothing seems perfect so we just keep postponing. We fear to take chances. It is true; nothing is perfect unless you love it. ‘She may not like it but it is better than nothing, and who knows it may turn to be perfect.’

As usual, he did not do much on Monday, except for planning. Today, somehow, he managed to leave office at 7 and bought her favorite ‘Kababs’ way back to his apartment. His maid ditched him today, so he had to do the cleaning himself. He thought of many things but in the end he settled for tried and tested way; flowers, food, ice-cream and a small gift. He had a plan. First, the flowers then they sit down and talk in the balcony, then dinner and ice-cream and finally the gift. Cliché, but trustworthy.
(He requested his friend to get ice-cream and a bouquet but she did not need to know this. This is what friends are for.).

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'What he must be doing? He was in office till 7. Hopefully, everything went well in his office. He was really busy. May be I overdid it. I just wanted to make him realize that there is more in life than work. Life doesn’t mean living only in weekends. We start working in order to make a living but gradually the work becomes our life.'
Richa was thinking on her way to Dhruv’s apartment. She had her expectation set to lowest level. She did not intend him to do anything fancy for her. Anything he will do will impress her.

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Oops, I forgot to put those Kababs in microwave. He hurried to kitchen. He was enjoying the moment.

May be next time, I will plan something better. He was slightly nervous only. He checked. Everything was in place. One question remains ‘Whether she will like it?’.

17 comments:

Prakhar said...

I like it, the story.. short nd sweet,
writing style ...unique and a bit edgy,which wud smoothen out if you write more often..which you should do!

Your story don't say it all and that's the beauty of it...it makes the reader think which in turn makes it memorable!

What's with the name Dhruv...he is always the hero of your stories..is he super commando dhruv?? :D

Avinash singh said...

hmmmmmmmmmmmmm

well i will like you to write this story of dhruv and richa after 10 years.. i m pretty sure it will the other way around that no matter what dhruv does , her expectations will be so high that he may not match up to it... coz he was able to overdo her expectations now.. so richa ki aadat bigad jaayegi...

Avinash singh said...

That was from dhruvs frend aks_p...
Now from me... i will say... awesome story.... as usual... you have still got the knack of building up the tempo nd delivering the soft punch...

gd 1...

Aurora said...

So sweet :)
I like the attempt...Loved it!! Absolutely! Brimming with emotion... fast... The feelings were depicted accurately.

Nice and pacy story ..good one :)

Harsh said...

nice1 short nd pacy................

sumi said...

nice one bhav dear......:)....see i read it completely...;)

Deepshikha said...

You see the wise always say, 'I am not a good writer, I don't write well, or I am not imaginative.' Well what they try to say is that, honey I am mocking you, of course I know how great I am, it's just you can't write well. :P

Sounds familiar nah voice?
Btw, its a very good touch to create the hype, and deliver a soft knock. Waiting for the next, which come after 7 months !?!?!

Voice said...

prakhar
Thanks mate

I like the name dhruv and i used to like SCD but not now..

Avi
isiliye first expectation humesa low set karna chahiye na

Voice said...

Aurora
thanks..

Harsh
:). real comment hi likh dete.

Sumi
thanks for reading it completely.

Deepshikha
This time it will be sooner.. max 15 days. I wont hit u.. u know that.

Anonymous said...

Nice :)

Srirupa said...

very good dear...
very real and imaginative too...
loved it :)

Voice said...

Thanks pm

ritika said...

i loved it............hope you got ol ur answers......nythng u do is just perfect,becoz u do it with ol affection...

saurabh said...

mere ko to laga ki "R"ahul and "S"imran ka story hai

ritika said...

tell people kiska story hai.....kiske liye hai....

Khul ja Simsim said...

Bhav..bhav...kahaniyon se bahar aaja...you yourself are 'the' "Dhruv" and always searching for 'a' "Richa"...
kahani acchi hai...par jaisa maine kaha ki ye Dhruv to tum hi ho....so Dhruv ka part to pura hai....but Richa.....uska kya?

Voice said...

Ritika
bus itni hi kahani thi... ushke baad sayad sad ending hi hai
sigh

Saurabh
R plan kar raha tha but fir socha hoga S to waise hi impressed hai

KJS
ishq hota nhi sabhi k liye..
yeh bana hai kisi kisi k liye.

Some people are not that lucky :)