Monday, January 22, 2007

Fa(il)ling in love

He is standing on the tallest building around. In spite of all measures taken by security department, he managed to get on the top of this 500 m tall building and he is about to JUMP. He is unaware of the surroundings, it is dark both inside and outside. He has lost his love, his only love and all his hopes. He loves her more than anything and after 2 years of relationship, she said “Sorry, we don’t have any future together”. Stunned and this came out of his mouth unconsciously “What! I don’t understand, what went wrong”. Her immediate reply was “Exactly! This is your problem. You never understand”. He let her go at that time, but he pledged that he would make her understand, how much he loved her and no one else can love her more than him. He cried; people showed sympathy. Tired of other sympathy, he started smiling, keeping his sorrow inside; people thought he had forgotten her. All this has led him to this moment – On top of this building.

He says his final words to her “Good bye” and jumped. Chilly wind starts hitting his face, forcing him to close his eyes. The falling sensation is making his body numb. In 10 seconds he is going to hit the ground. What he has missed was the air drag which has increased considerably by his open arms and loose clothes. He starts thinking about her. He is sure that she will feel sad; he wants to make her sad for leaving him so that she can realize that she did a mistake. A smile appears on his face. His conscience replied “Is this what you call LOVE”. He argued logically. But at that last moment he is not able to cheat his conscience. Why not! Cheating own conscience is the easiest thing to do. For the first time, he not only forgives her but instead he is feeling guilty. One thought leading to another and in those 5 seconds his whole life flashed in his mind. He hated all those who were unfair to him. But then there were many instances when he was unfair. His eyes are still closed but there is light now. The meaning of love and friendship are clearer than ever. He remembers the kindness shown to him, which he has often overlooked. Love is not in life time commitment, it is in moments. She cannot marry him does not mean that she does not love him anymore. She does. Being together is not everything and if it is everything he already has 2 years of it. If those 2 years means nothing then probably after spending 50 years together he will think like this only. Love is when and what you feel. He cannot die. He has to live for those people who love him. His mind is totally clear now. In the beginning he has opened his arms in submission but now his arms are open to embrace. His face calm and eyes still closed.

But he is falling. Falling at very high speed. This falling seems familiar. He has seen himself falling many a times in his dreams. His eyes still closed. And he is thinking “It has to be dream and now his eyes will open and he will find himself lying on bed.. and from tomorrow, he will set everything right. Actually everything is already right. Only his mind was full of anxiety which was getting projected in the real life and now that is all gone……………………………” THUD!!

39 comments:

sonik said...

Love's Labour Lost? Well I agree 'twas a silly thing to do.

Anonymous said...

frst of all change this template

and now

i liked ur concept but not the end ..
i don know why but i felt a bit sarcastic way to potray love ..

why this is so ..

but as always i love the way u have woven all the words ..very very dramatic n yes every was so moving ..cut cut cut kind
..like this :)

SD said...

hello ...
first up, its really pointless to jump -

feeling the pain is just so much better -

living in hope is so much better -

btw, a title could be :

love ... and oblivion

Anonymous said...

Hmmmmmm
well it was very interesting article.
very interesting one indeeed
and as u hav asked for a title i wud recommend

"Fa(il)ling in love..."

:))
choose what u prefer
:)


(shobhit)

Yashu.K said...

.......... NO COMMENTS!
i dint lke it :P

rakshas said...

falling

Voice said...

-sonik
posting this post was also a silly thinkg to do :P

-chitra
find me a better template
i guess u r right. i am sarcastic about love :P

-sd
thats was the morale of ths story yaar :(
:D

-shobhit
thnx for the title buddy

-yashu
next time :P

-rakshas
viks is this u??

saurabh said...

good

underroot(2*H/g)=underroot (2*500/10)=10 seconds..

i liked it..

suru

Avinash singh said...

aah thank god u made a 'thud' sound at the end not a 'thachhak' with 'phachh'..

saala bus bed se gira .. agli baar se sapna nahi dekhega aisa...

waise bhi kaha gaya hai 'glass is half full' nd u can beat a bullet..imagine karne wale ke uper hota hai... nd i am neo or better..

Avinash singh said...

coming on a lighter note nw after that serious one..

maan gaye tere nd suru dono ko..
ek banda itna soch ke likha nd dusra observe bhi kar liya .. maa ksama lajawab

Avinash singh said...

nd now on lightest possible mode...

awesome write up...
especially all those funda on love nd frendship..

ur in love now.. coz true frendship to tha hi mere saath.. so this new effect can only be due to love...
ab bata kisse???

Anonymous said...

how can something like that can be the end of world!!!

anyway thankfully its the sound(THUD!!) of falling from a bed.

--chandu

Voice said...

-suru
this is min expected na.. mera creative skills kharab hai physics nahi :P

-avi
yeh naya angle bhi achha hai.. now my story can have two endings :)u r better :). i was always in love :P. kab nahi tha bata :P

-chandu
fall in love then u will know how one person becomes ur whole world :P.. and hence sometime later end of the world :P

that cud b alternate ending

----------------------------
thnx suru avi and chandu for commenting :P


Voice

Anonymous said...

Hmm..
Don't agree...! Very easy to say " this is love, i'll keep on loving her forever, love is to sacrifice" . What i believe if u love some one.. "don't let her go away at any cost"..but if she still goes away.. she was never urs.. or she doesn't deserve u!

But good composition!!! :)
Cheers!!

Athena said...

Firstly chng this template!!

waise nice composition.. ye kiski sachchai yahan bayan kiya hai tumne ;) nice one!!

As i had penned in my blog, sometimes its all destiny tht u meet someone or get departed!! Every other person who enters ur life comes for some known and unknown reason, so he shud be satisfied tht he met her, he was lucky to have been part of her life... He should cherish those moments they spend together than lamenting on the same...

template chng maadi :DD

Naman Sinha said...

nice blog. hope that its not a real story. But please change the title. He was not falling in love. love is not like that.In true love u dont look for ur happiness but look for the happiness of those u love. If that girl was more happy with other boy then let it be. Let her go with other.Atleast she told him that she is not happy with him.

From a practical veiw point.... why waste ur time , ur energy and ur life for a girl who doesnt care for ur sentiments.Ditch her and find some other girl who truely loves u.

wasie easier said than done....because love is blind and may be deaf ,dumb and mad too

Voice said...

-anon[dead fish>
khud to maine pyar kia nahi hai kabhi... isiliye anjaan hu abhi tak

-athena
yeh template change to main tab karunga jab tum mujhe isase achha template dhundh kar dogi :P
kisi ki sachai nahi bayan ki hai..totally fictional like my love letter :P

-naman
nah it is totally fictional dear :)
and yes ur both view points are just :P


thnx athena fishfry and naman for commenting on my blog :)

Megha said...

hmmmm.....wht can i say its stupidity or smthing else...

ending life for sm other ppl who doesnt care :O

may be thts y ppl(atleast me:P) said never trap under this sarcastic luv relation::P

================================
* again m late in giving comments:(

* mein bhi zara bed se gir kar dekhungi:P
hw it feel to fall 4m peak point:d

* ....abki baar zara falshback story bhi bata dena:P

*nw comin back to u.....asusual bhavesh u n ur weird thinking again create smthing unique ...:)

atleast meine nahi socha tha yeh luv story asi hogi

* n yeah change this template:P....kuch maza nahi aa reha

Voice said...

megha

dekhte hai.. jab tumko pyar ho jayega to tum kya karti ho aur pyar to hona hi hai :P

flashback story is not important :P


tum itne kaam rehte hai ki tum late to ho hi jaogi na :-w

thnx :) for commenting on my stupid blog..

and yeh template to tumne hi choose karke dia tha... cherry bhi tumne hi lagwaya tha :x. not u r saying to change it :O. agar change karwana hai to search me a new one.

Megha said...

naa ji naa.....asa mere sath toh hona hi nahi hai:d

aur nahi toh kya kitna kaam rehta hai mujhe(kitne reply karne ko rehte hai:P)

uff tumhe cherry se kya prob hai:O......
ha ab change kar do temp....:)

ab phir se temp search karna padega tumhare stupid blog ke liye:o

Anonymous said...

i dont think any one has that holy soul...we all are selfish..we all say we dont expect but e do..from life from love....
points for makin it a love physics rathr than a love chemistry...:-)..pats suru,gr8 observation
suru

shweta said...

i didnt like the end...........even law believe in giving a second chance but i dont........if a person is so weak that he can not differentiate btwn love and "future possibility" y do he claims that he loves?????????
its not necessary for him to live and rightn up the things

shweta

Anonymous said...

seems u hav seen too much of S.L.Bhansali muvis whr he alwayz shows the dark side of luv....but a nice interpretation of luv....the problem wid ppl here (ppl hu hav posted comments) r they just can't accpet the fact tht in this beautiful world thr still exists a dark side wich can't b ignored.....Keep it up Bhavesh babu....miles to go...looking for ur next blog :)

Voice said...

-megha
we will see. waise face reader aunty ko convince karwana chahiye tha tumhe

hmm... ha pata hai bahut replies karti ho.. apna blogger bhi khol kar dekhti ho kabhi.

theek hai change kar dunga.. pehle search karke kuchh achha bata dena

-suru
if no one is that holy soul then bolna bhi nahi chahiye na that u love someone :P and physics chemistry are moe complex than love :D. thnx for commenting

-shweta
but i guess everyone and anyone can change.but yes i agree that he/she shouldnot claim that he was/is in love. thnx for commenting

-nivas
wow, i ddnt expect ur comment and too appreciation wala. thnx.. i needed it

Anonymous said...

Great philosophy on love and friendship. The quote "Love is not in life time commitment, it is in moments." is really awesome...

Piyush k Mishra said...

I dont know what others say...but I like your short story. Its touchy.
It happens several times when we are wrong but dont realise and ignore those who make us see our faults and when we realise....its too late.
In today's life we see more and more broken hearts and broken family and thats just because we never accept the truth....I m wrong.

Good
Very Good

Chitrangada said...

change template

Nimesh said...

Dude! Long time no siege!! kaha ho aajkal?

bp said...

Going right dude! I appreciate(and njoy) your(ur protagonist's) attitude...
I can no more hate those people who fall from 100 buildings top for their failure in love... I will consider that they havnot read ur blog...which certainly is not a crime :)

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Psycho McCrazy said...

bhau, kahe dream se nahin jaga diye bechare ko. kabhi kabhi doosra chance de dena chaiye usko jo seekh jaata hai life ka lesson.

Deepshikha Saraf said...

ek baat boliye pls... Y exactly did he jump... i dont think to prove a point to his love or to cheat himself... Well i guess it was senseless jumping coz' no one deserves ur life more than u..

Anonymous said...

Sorry to say this but this is not an original post . I have read the same thing somewhere else too thinking that was original but guess even that person was not original

amit said...

sahi me ji .. you have great vision to realise and feel the real life situation just by imagination and your dreams (while sleeping).
great,..thinking....

sneha said...

hey!
i really liked this article of yours.
good one!i guess things become clear only when u r losing them.thank god it was only a thud!!

vineet said...

hey its really cool yaar..

Rishter Shigur said...

brilliant!!!!reminds me of SAKI....although some might say that it is a tad unromantic, but i feel that this article portrays true feelings and anxieties of men who try to show that they have hearts of steel.Men do dream and they do dream silly stuff!!!

Bhawna said...

something resonated.. :)

Pear said...

now that I think of it again, you chose an easy ending.. for some of us, the distance between the jump and the thud is not of few seconds but of years, almost half of lifetime, and that is when the flashes are recurrent and emptiness permanent..